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Post by Deleted on Aug 31, 2013 23:08:26 GMT -5
The first ones SOOOO long I won't do it yet!
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Post by Deleted on Aug 31, 2013 23:13:07 GMT -5
Yvonne is suspiciously similar to you as you'd like to be. She may be popular, or she may not, but no matter what she's impossible to ignore; she stands out... just the way you always wanted to. She always knew she was special, destined for great things - and probablyf made sure everyone else knew it too. She's had more than her fair share of hard knocks, and probably spends more time than she ought moaning about it. And you've been sparing with the free handouts: whatever she gains, she's worked for.
You may have let yourself get a little too close to Yvonne. Maybe she's you as you wish you were, or maybe you're just afraid no one will like her and are trying to give her a free ride. Have some confidence in your writing! Yvonne is a good character. Give her room to be herself before you stifle her.
Lol WTF that's NOTHING like me
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Post by Evelyn on Aug 31, 2013 23:13:18 GMT -5
Are you sure?
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Post by pinkycrystal on Aug 31, 2013 23:13:36 GMT -5
So she's a princess, right? And she gets kidnapped by pirates, RIGHT?! What time is this story set in? If its during the pirate era, then she shouldn't be wearing that because nobody wore that stuff in those days. Females wore stuff like    But more poofy. If this is set in modern times, then she shouldn't be kidnapped by pirates because the modern century has no pirates. |
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Post by pinkycrystal on Aug 31, 2013 23:15:02 GMT -5
Oh and, the more you insist your characters are good, the more you will look like a try-hard.
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Post by pinkycrystal on Aug 31, 2013 23:15:31 GMT -5
And if the first test is too long for you, try the second test. It's a lot shorter.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 31, 2013 23:17:19 GMT -5
41 for the second one but WTF she's not a sue!
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Post by Evelyn on Aug 31, 2013 23:18:01 GMT -5
Yes, that's what I expected to be honest. Sorry.
By the way, Pinky's right.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 31, 2013 23:19:22 GMT -5
Yah but this is like a SECRET organization of pirates and its so modern day
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Post by pinkycrystal on Aug 31, 2013 23:20:50 GMT -5
*facepalm*
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Post by Deleted on Sept 1, 2013 0:04:22 GMT -5
you guys don't be mean to trixie she reoirted you already so look out.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 1, 2013 0:28:09 GMT -5
Sorry guys but I'm on my friend's side.
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Post by Evelyn on Sept 1, 2013 1:18:49 GMT -5
Could you please quote the messages that you reported? I'd like to know what we wrote that offended you to make sure that nothing of the type happens again.
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Post by Misha on Sept 1, 2013 8:22:47 GMT -5
OK ALL OF YOU STOP
This is getting out of hand oh my.
Trixie: Ember and Pinky weren't trying to offend you, they were trying to help. You need to make your character fit the era she is in. Also there are many websites which help generate names for different eras and backgrounds so you make one which works with you story/role play. Also it's never a bad thing to run a character through those tests, and if you get a high score instead of getting angry maybe add a flaw or take away one of her good points to keep her balanced. Everyone has a flaw Trixie. EVERYONE. Whether it is that they're not aesthetically pleasing (good looking) or that they are rude and harsh or that they trust people too easily everyone has a flaw and there is no harm in giving your character a flaw to make her more "human". Experiment with her personality see what works and doesn't.
Ember and Pinky: I understand this is frustrating and I know you both hate Mary Sues with a passion. I've read through this thread (well the last two pages) a few times and although your comments were fine, I understand why Trixie may have been offended by some of them. I'm not saying they WERE offensive because in my opinion they were not but I just mean sometimes just double check what you write because the person on the other side doesn't know the tone you were trying to pass across. You may have written it in a way so it passes off as a normal tone but the other person might end up reading it in an angry, aggressive tone.
So to conclude this little speech of mine- Trixie, try and not get too offended by things because I'm sure they didn't mean it and it was to help you out.
Ember and Pinky- before you press reply just make sure it your posts don't come across as rude to the other person.
I don't mean to offend anyone with this post, this is just getting slightly annoying and I feel that both sides of this argument(?) could have been a little bit better.
Thank you and Good Day/Good Night
*takes deep breath out*
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Post by Deleted on Sept 1, 2013 13:37:58 GMT -5
Ok ok ok ok but I already said SHE ALRRADY HASS FLAWWWSSSSSSSSSS Y can't ANYYYYY11111 understand that!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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